What went wrong?

There was a beautiful girl online who thought she is not pretty bumped into a stranger by accident. The stranger asked for her friendship only and promised he has no intention of meeting her personally, he just needed a connection to his soul. Girl agreed happily as she felt safe to continue. They became soulmates and inseparable.

At this stage the girl had a urge to meet him and she wanted him to feel her. Stranger refused at first saying that that would would be begining of destruction of the their relationship, but agreed after girl’s persuasion on the condition that, girl has to meet him with closed eyes and had to be done in a nearby forest in privacy. Excited girl agreed.

Girl waited for him on the agreed time but eyes closed. Then she felt the movement in the bushes, she held her breath with excitement and anticipation. She felt a touch on her fingers. It was a touch she was waiting for. Now she wanted to open her eyes, she asked him..suddenly there was rush of wind before she opened her eyes he was gone!. She never heard from him again! She wondered what went wrong?

Word Count : 199
Image Courtesy : A mixed bag 2011
Post submitted for Al’sΒ Sunday Photo Fiction.

 

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37 Comments Add yours

  1. Rekha says:

    Nice take on the prompt 😊😊 nan maatu kelidri πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚ (from supercalifragilisticexpialidocious)

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    1. Raj says:

      Thank you… nimma manthu hege refuse madli? πŸ™‚

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      1. Rekha says:

        πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚ haudu haudu πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‰

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  2. As first dates go, that’s an odd one! Excellent take on the prompt.

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    1. Raj says:

      Thank you Keith ❀😊

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  3. Yoly says:

    Wow! What an amazing post. I love honeymoon stage of relationships. This reminds me of it. I once had a relationship like this but it ended because it felt too real.

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    1. Raj says:

      See, that’s the problem… We humans not satisfied with anything πŸ˜‚πŸ€”

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      1. Yoly says:

        Ha ha! Very true… I think love is mysterious so we always want to get a taste of it.

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  4. Joy Pixley says:

    If he is what I think he is, I can see why he’d be afraid of her seeing him. Better off sticking to an online friendship, sometimes!

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    1. Raj says:

      Yes, better keep that strictly online.. personal and online two different things, we should not mix them up. And I feel online world is never a real world! πŸ€” ✌ Thank you for you comment..😊

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      1. Joy Pixley says:

        Some people (or not-people, as the case may be) benefit from the online world not being the real world. πŸ˜€ Whereas I am hoping to meet some of my fellow blogger friends one of these days — if only they weren’t scattered all across the world.

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      2. Raj says:

        Its nice definitely to meet people for real.. But sometimes you know the image what you have in your brain..about a online friend could be totally different than the real world.. so there is a risk of losing that “Image” πŸ™‚

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      3. Joy Pixley says:

        That is definitely true!

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  5. michael1148humphris says:

    He was right to go. It could not have worked.

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    1. Raj says:

      I think so too, it was a forbidden Love πŸ€”

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  6. Reena Saxena says:

    Dragons online… There are several more species πŸ™‚

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    1. Raj says:

      Exactly… more the dragon .. more interesting .. πŸ˜€

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  7. L.E.R.T says:

    Almost a beauty and the beast feel. Good, crisp writing. Well done.

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    1. Raj says:

      I think that should have been the title! πŸ˜€ Thank you very much for your feedback.. πŸ™‚ Cheers!

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  8. Very good writing.

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    1. Raj says:

      Thank you Neel for you kind words… πŸ™‚

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  9. Awesome story. What I got from it was that he was satisfied with what he had and she always wanted more and more till she lost the good thing they had

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    1. Raj says:

      Yes.. he was satisfied because he got more than what he hoped for, where as the girl did not … yes finally day of judgment.. I feel sorry for them though… πŸ™‚

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  10. James says:

    Isn’t there an online service for dragons to meet other dragons?

    The image does conjure up images of a forbidden romance. I went that direction myself with a very different outcome.

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    1. Raj says:

      Dragons meeting dragons.. yes .. and recommended πŸ˜€ Glad that you were able to get through.. πŸ™‚ I think what path you chose… here dragon ran away.. πŸ˜€

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  11. I was hooked from the beginning with this story. And though there was no real resolution, the feelings remain. A very powerful story.

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    1. Raj says:

      Yes.. for some situations no solutions.. I think we all have such situations and we just have to live by them.. πŸ™‚

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  12. Star Spatika says:

    It was nice but why didn’t she see him again? After all he asked for her friendship so why did he leave her simply

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    1. Raj says:

      See… he was a dragon. probably he did not want her to know about it..

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      1. Star Spatika says:

        But you didn’t even tell in the story that he was a dragon

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      2. Raj says:

        πŸ˜€ that’s why you should always check the picture! ✌

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  13. Star Spatika says:

    Where do you live and what’s your mother tongue

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  14. athling2001 says:

    What always seems to go wrong. Always more, more, more. I am sad for both.

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    1. Raj says:

      Yes, that’s the whole cause of sadness.. unfortunately we cant control it either… even I am sad for them both too! Thank you for your comment πŸ™‚

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  15. Good story Raj. A pity she wanted to push it to the next level.

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    1. Raj says:

      Thank you. That’s exactly I feel about it… But sometimes we do it… And lose whatever we had. πŸ€”

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      1. Unfortunately that is true.

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